I am a Year 4 student in the Uru Mānuka Cluster. My teacher is Miss Goslin. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first drafts. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Tuesday, August 17, 2021
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To support my learning I ask you to comment as follows:
1. Something positive - Begin with a greeting. Talk about something you like about what I have shared.
2. Thoughtful - A comment that will mean something to me to let me know you read/watched or listened to what I had to say. - use any language.
3. Something helpful - Give me some ideas for next time or ask me a question.
Encourage me to make another post.
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Hi Bailey, thank you for sharing your persuasive writing. I think I would like to be invisible. Which one do you think you would like to be?
ReplyDelete- Mrs Russell
Hi Bailey. You have some really neat ideas about being able to fly rather than invisible. I like the 'flying away from school' one the best. Where else would you go if u could fly? I think the bright colours make your work really stand out! Maybe next time you could introduce your persuasive writing with a question or statement. I can see you take a lot of pride in your work. Keep it up!!
ReplyDeleteHi Bailey. I love the colourful background you used on your work. It really stands out. I think flying would be great too. I like the 'flying away from school' idea the best. Perhaps next time you could add an introduction to your persuasive writing. I can see you take a lot of pride in your work. Where else would you like to fly to? Keep up the good work Alyssa. Great job.
ReplyDeleteHi Bailey. I really like the the colourful background you used. It makes your work stand out. You have some really neat ideas about why it would be good to fly instead of being invisible. The 'flying away from school' one was my favourite. Where else would you fly to? Next time maybe you could add an introduction to your persuasive writing. I can see you take a lot of pride in your work. Keep it up Alyssa. Great job.
ReplyDeleteHi Bailey, I agree it would be great to fly. I would choose that too. Great work - Mrs Hansen
ReplyDeletewell done baily your hard work is great
ReplyDeletewell done
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